by Saxon Stonedyke
thought this story was brilliant is there any chance you could continue it
nicely developed characters, i think i have a crush on bobbie, myself! and the jealous owl was a brilliant touch.
the sex scene shocked me a little, since i don't usually read lesbian stories and had no idea some girls walk around wearing strapons (!) so i learned something new, and it was actually kinda hot. cheers.
Ending was a little too neat, but who cares? Good hot sex; but a strap-on while working with no lady in sight for months? And Carrie badly hurt, but so athletic? OK, I'll suspend disbelief just this once. You can tell a good story, but your mechanicals really need help. Too much for me to quibble just now, but if you want a copy editor in future, PM me.
This is a nice little five-star story, a pleasurable quick read. The idea of a jealous, one-eyed owl was a nice touch.
Now forgive an elderly straight man's ignorance but in so many stories I've read on this site there have been butch lesbians permanently wearing strap-ons under their daily clothes, even when living alone. Does this really happen or is it authors' licence? I ask because it just seems a bit pointless to me, and it must make going to the lavatory a nuisance.
You rushed the ending. Great plotting and build up then bam it’s suddenly ending like you were rushing out the door. Minor quibble for a story that’s super interesting:)