All Comments on 'A World for the Taking Ch. 02'

Again a Great Story

Great chapter, great story as all of yours are!!!! Ignore the morons, write what you want when you want and we will appreciate whatever you give us!!!

OUTASTANDING!!!

Boy, oh boy! This was already a really good adventure story of life on the Frontier. And now, it is getting down right exciting!

At the very end, when Mike jerks back after seeing the pilot is jZav'Etch, it doesn't mention him getting her helmet off. You described the visor as opaque and that Mike was having difficutly getting it off. Then, suddenly, they could all see the pilot's face.

I only mention this because the story was very fluid and my brain was rolling along nicely, but tripped up at that one moment. Just a thought, in case you decide to do revisions or move this story go another medium.

Given the quality and lack of explicit sex scenes, this story could easily make the jump from Lit to more mainstream areas.

and very enjoyable!

Well . . . . Done , thanks !

Now that we're past most of the foreplay, the story is getting better and better, lol.

Great story, wonderful writing. I’m stoked.