All Comments on 'A World for the Taking Ch. 05'

My thumb poked on the four star and now I cannot change it. Love your universe and each of the stories in it so far.

well done! I hope you will turn back to storm world at some point. 5 stars. g

Geez Leweez, you sure can write an exciting battle scene! Really well done!

So glad you are writing again! Loving the rapid fire updates!

Thank you!

I'm really enjoying this. Nice job.

Thank You

*soft lil chuckle and grin* Love the "Jungle Book" reference.... wonder how many others will pick up on it?

Just a heads up, Roy's parents were indicated to be dead from what I gathered in Ch. 02. ""It burned," supplied Jean quietly. Yoshi had not heard the story of how Roy and Angel had become orphans."

In this chapter Roy mentions Angel but also asks about his folks and gets a response back about his dad. Not a huge deal if they aren't more involved later just seemed odd because you introduced them as being dead already.

Roy and Angel were adopted/fostered by the Postelthawaites after the teens' parents died in the fire. It would be really unusual for an adopted child to go around calling their new parents Mr. or Mrs. So-and-so. Though Roy still remembers his parents and obviously still loves them (He goes to their station and leaves flowers on their graves, after all.) Mr. and Mrs. Postelthwaite are the parents he and his sister have at the time the story takes place, therefore he calls them his 'folks'.

Nice reference! I'm really enjoying your writing.