All Comments on 'Abandoned Building Homeless Voyeur'

I have been following you since FSI and you have been my absolute fave. you are way better than this babes and you know that. Im looking forward to some of the vintage kinky stuff from you.

Sometimes kinkiness has to make way for reality & its exactly what happened over here. But since the story was more tragedy than erotica unless you take into account that the poor dude died due to all his blood getting pumped into his penis for an overly elongated period. (which makes it Perverted Comic Tragic Erotica).

All in all im just plain happy that you are back. Your stories always give me a hard on (not this one though).

Or is it the most uplifting 15 seconds-long ( the approximate length of hobo's orgasm) tragedy ever detailed ?

nice story

wonder why you left your other story sequel half way and started this story

do complete the incomplete story sequel too

cheers,

I think this was a great story. I loved the build-up and the realism of it. I can easily see something like this happening, with a woman letting it all hang out for a man she pities, especially when she knows she is about to leave and not come back. Everyone enjoys being admired, and I think this captured the spirit of a shy exhibitionist wonderfully.

Not to hammer on it too much, but the thing that makes the story so great is that it really seems like something that could actually happen. The idea of watching someone doing average day to day activities, with a hint of eroticism, and then finally hitting the sexy jackpot probably would send me to heaven too.

I have ready other stories of yours and and enjoyed them. Keep up the good work!

Great!!! 5 stars

This reminds me of those Saki stories I read in school... tragic n funny at the same time... Spot on about Bombays poor... I was commenting about it to a friend that its amazing how they look at all the lights etc and just get on with it... almost makes me think that life isn't too bad...Hadn't logged on to literotica to get philosophical

anyway glad to see you back...

One more best creation from one of the best authors here.

Awesome story, indeed ur story need not have hardcore sex to get teased and excited, really !

Well, felt sad about the end. Maybe I think, he died happy after spending some long time in egony and distress...Actually if he had survived and waited again only to find her gone 4 evr, surely he would have died, sadly, but here peacefully, happily.

But the build up was as always, teasingly exciting !

Hats-Off

just thought maybe she might have left, he would have survived, and she somehow returns in 6 months, marrying happily with her fiance, and probably gaining some more confidence and understanding. Finds the old man still trying for his luck, get impresses by his devotion and makes up to give him more than just showing off !

Well just a idea, if u find it real enough and if u write a story like this and pushes the girl to more freedom, it would be great.

Ofcourse it's not necessary tht a gud stry need a sex always, but this taboo thing surely spices up a bit !

Anyways, a Master-Piece...

Regards

plz write your squel shop floor guy,this story also wonderfull

one of the best read so far. but the best was mukta's story. can you continue on the fifty rupee whore story

Wonderful narrative and beautiful buildup. Looking forward to read more. All the best.

Indian writers of erotica must have a forum to discuss their stories and to network.

Awesome! Missed you a lot, welcome back!

Your writing style is of the racy Jackie Collins, Candace Bushnell ,Shobha De , Sex &the City , Desperate Housewives genre !! Please keep it up !

Often when one has had an exhilarating , exuberant experience he or she sometimes says or feels I could die happy just now but what the actually envisage in their subconscious is they want to encapsulate that happy moment into an

Eternal Joy or an Infinite Eternal Joy kind of thing so as to experience that moment everlastingly or immortally like India's Cricket World Cup glory !

A similar thing seems to have happened to the aged Watcher !

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Have been following your stories for last couple of years. This time it took quite a while, but definitely was worth the wait. In fact, it is the best story i have read on this site for a while. A true erotica with a superb buildup, enough to keep it erect while reading and on top of it an insightful story with a quirky climax. Hope you write a real book someday...erotica or otherwise...

Your work is amazing. You are one of the finest authors i have ever read on literotica. :)

ps- you rule \m/

Have always admired your work... here, you've surpassed yourself; bravo!

Awesome dear.. Just super.. Thats all I can say..

I love your story...!!!

welcome champion to the world you left for over a year. Missed you a lot.But happy to see you back. Champion is back and back with a bang.

Very nice story with high degree of realism and tenderness. Makes a change from the usual slam-bang stories. Are you the real heroine of this story or may be some close friend of yours? I have also based my story on this site on a true incident. Please do read that.

Do complete "the shop floor guys". That was a good slam-bang story.

...and that is quite a combination! Loved the story...every Indian girl could relate to it. Quite enjoyed it. Thanks for writing!

I am a young 23 year old keralite brahmin conservative girl.. my unlce resides in dubai.. he has a son.. completely spoiled with smoking, drinking, partying, non veg food, girls, gambling, etc etc.. Me being a super ethical and moral girl, my uncle thought i could help in making my cousin bro better person.. he invited me to dubai.. i went there.. he told me about the situation and wanted to spend some time with cousin bro and try and bring him on right track.. late in the evening, he came drunk in the house.. i tried and talk with him about leaving these habits.. he told me, he would leave everything if I try his kind of life for a week with him.. he wanted me to spend a week with him in a nearby guest house and if after living with him for a week, by following his kind of life, if i still ask him to quit all those bad habits, he will actually quit.. i accepted the challenge as i thought it would be easy for me to say NO to his life after a week.. although i will have to sacrifice myself for a week.. we went there.. day 1. non veg, day 2. drinking and smoking day 3. wearing revealing dresses and swim with him day 4, watching adult movies, day 5. gambling, strip poker and sex, day 6. he asks me what is my answer to his kind of life... i go nude in the kitchen, cut a piece of chicken and pour wine in a glass and serve him.. i say, good bye to my old life.. i love this new life... please make a story from this...

Hi... I love your stories especially The Shop floor guys and when it rains... anyway my purpose of writing this was to ask you if you remember the sex forum called free sexy Indians. I think there was an author called Grid who wrote this story about a mother and son gang banged... it was a great story and I can't seem to find it anywhere now...bit like aurelius' style would you have any idea sbout it? No disrespect intended... you my fsv author when it comes to erotica... but you are the only link I could remember with fsi.. Cheers

Great

Loved it. Not only was it erotic, but the storyline was beautiful and the writing was excellent. Just happened to chance on your blog, would love to read more! Thanks for the orgasm :*

Loved it ...so erotic

Was wishing for contact between them though

Very good writing skills...nice slow buildup...keep the good work coming

I love this story, but it saddens me every time I read it. I know it can't be, but I often imagine that the old man's body belonged to another man, and that he might one day see her again and enjoy each other.

This is a story that's both erotic and lovely. I wish a lot could've happened and the old man could've seen more. Amazing story. Keep up the great work.