All Comments on 'Academy Girl Calandra'

Overall, really good. The grammar and tenses need pruned as bad as the plant, though. Find a better way to say breast than tit-flesh too. It was all heavy breathing until that hyphenated word made me snort laughter. Take another pass at this and it will be gold.

Although that probably was because I was too busy... you know... Overall a good read I agree, with plenty of tension and overall ridiculousness. Really, the form and organization is less "staged" than the average decent erotica (literature-wise, that is), and I honestly find it difficult to balance choice words and actions in a story with good planning without making it a boring read.