All Comments on 'Adam & Eve - Eve Loses a Bet'

Thanks for the story, it took me back to when I played pool with my boyfriend at the time and I lost so had to pay up, hope you continue with the story as would like to see her win and tease him mercifully until he begs or explodes

It's a good story, with plenty of momentum and imagery, but you've GOT to either put it in the present tense or the past tense. It switches back and forth so many times, I started to lose interest, which is NOT what I want to be thinking about when reading these stories.