All Comments on 'Adam's Story'

Rubbish!

Not sure what to make of this. It seems very incomplete.

(Looks around blankly, shaking my head mumbling, "What the hell was that.")

Not a very good story teller, is he? In fact, I suspect it is really the first shot of a room full of monkeys set loose on typewriters.

It is clear from comments early in this monologue that this is an (unacknowledged) initial chapter in a series! Poor Form! (also, PLEASE keep all chapters in the SAME category! Since it is clear that Chris and the other angels were not visiting the Garden to visit Adam's stinky ass, we, the readers, can discern that Eve was a welcome addition to the Garden. Kinda like Celestial R&R, and Eve was the LBFM. Adam, though there first, was just a sperm donor to help produce fresh, tight Eve variants to stock the Garden!

This entry chapter failed, IM(not so H)O, in the main objective - to pique interest in future chapters! It was too obscure and oblique ... or just plain weird!

2* (with hopes I'm wrong, the POTENTIAL is HUGE!)

A short intro to a series - it was fun to read and hopefully many more chapter will follow - like to know what all those visiting angels were up to, bet Eve did too.

That made.no sense at all.