All Comments on 'Adjusting Amanda'

Not natural blonde but dyed bush which u said was brown auburn. Story was mostly a fetish . Good concept but bad execution

Probably fair comment actually. Reading it back before I posted it I thought of ways I'd have handled the telling differently if I ever rewrote it, but decided to leave it be and see what readers made of it.

Nice idea. I’m sure there are extreme ph fans out there who must love the detail you included. A small criticism - you mixed a strong ph / nylons fetish with a somewhat weaker hypnotism mechanism. I don’t know how it could be written otherwise, but I feel it took away from your main theme a little. Nevertheless, it was an enjoyable read and thanks for posting.