All Comments on 'After Dinner Drinks Ch. 01'

Maybe it's just fantasy but I LOVE it!!

Nothing major, but there are quite a few things that a simple grammar-check or spellcheck program would have fixed. The sex scenes are descriptive and imaginitive, but they read more like porn than erotica. It had the feel of a play-by-play sports report, and none of the human interest. The emotional content of a story is a bit like foreplay to me, and while it had the potential to be so much more, this felt like a very unsatisfying quickie. Half of what I was looking for simply wasn't there, and the remaining half ended sentences with prepositions and hyphenated at will. The work has SO much potential and it's a relatively easy fix that will make all of the difference. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future; I'm sure it will be phenomenal.

Such a marvelous and colourful story. I can't remember the last time a story made me imagine a scene so vividly. Lesbian scat play is too good to be true. Love your work!!

Trust me it was way better than a porno.

Goes all the way, with great rich language. This is what erotica should be.