All Comments on 'After School Hookup Ch. 03'

The story line was very good. Could have done something more with Whitney walking in on a session or something.

Very nicely written. I hope there will be more chapters. Some at school, to give the teacher control over the student, but some at home so they can relax and have open, satisfying sex. The parents could catch them or discover what their little girl is up to. Whitney could walk in on a hot sex session and blackmail her favorite teacher into letting the lacross captain lick his young sister. So many oppertunities to expand.

Very Good. Nice and Kinky! Keep up the good work!

Next episode, let's see them in bed. Then she needs to bang Kelsey.

This has to be one of the best stories i have read on here and i have been reading here since 2001 . Very good job . Keep it going , so many places you could take them .

I can't wate to see the next chapter!!!

Elegant and effortless.

I think I now have a thing for plaid skirts :)

5 just doesn't seem a high enough score for this story .... WHEW!

This is an awesome story with great detail, and your use of good grammar is refreshing considering what stories make it onto this site these days. This story is a bit long for my tastes, but its complete lack of rambling more than makes up for it. Keep up the good work.

AYE! That was perfect to every last detail.

I really liked the interaction that Alice had with "pussy". That was really fun to read!

Excellent story!

Plaid skirts are hot and so is Alice. Great story.

damn,,,,,,,,,that was hot

oh my god, i think i csme thrice while reading this.. AWESOME. super sexy stuff here..

This story was delightful. Next time perhaps have Alice try anal.

So Hot. So Fucking Hot.

yummie story

I am so wet that story was soo hot

Beautifully written, excellent grammar and spelling and lots of intimate detail. Liked the idea of referring to pussy as "her". Well done.

Kinky, sweet, and even a touch romantic. I love the way you characterize both Allison and Evan, and the buildup over the previous two chapters was very well-done.

I also particularly like the way Allison personifies her pussy; it's an inspired narrative touch, and very cute. :)

One of the best things I've ever read on here, and I haven't even finished it yet ;)

Read the series, loved it loved it loved it. Well done, sir. Kudos, kudos.

Every once in a while Im amazed at a story on here that makes up for the so-so ones, then another good one. Lately it's been either bad, copies of similar stories slightly changed or just flat out horrors seemingly written by fifth graders with as little knowledge about the english language as they seem to have about basic female anatomy.

...then last night, right before bed, I queued up four or five prospect incest stories in hopes of finding something that, well... Didn't suck ass. Heh.

Wow. A gem! The story wrapped several of my fantasies up in a nice, tight ball and threw in a few I had forgotten about! The school girl outfits, the skirts, the naughty girls rolling up the waist hem when the teachers aren't looking to shorten the length. (Well maybe that wasn't in there but...;) incest... the sister I never had but wished for... me mentally transposing her for a girl in my class at the private school our parents forced us to go to. Brother/sister, teacher/student. (Delicious shiver) ...I need to find me a girl on craigslist that wants to rollplay! (Mischevious grin;)

...then there is the way things were said and phrased... Miss Pussy immediately caught my attention (pardon the pun;) and I loved 'her' being given a role as a person! I haven't seen that done in a long time! There were a few other similar bits of writing that departed from the usual, tired stuff we usually see.

Thank you for the great story telling! I'll have to save your page and see what I've beenmissing out on!

M@

this was amazing. i love her sweet innocence mixed with her easy desires, im envious of her courage and in the deepest part of my fantasies, jealous because in dont have my own older brother. i was able to fully enjoy being her, especially the details like the hello kitty undies, thats totally my own style =^. .^=

thank you for a wonderful mind blowing... read ;)

just the right amount of lust romance and sex.loved it

Thank you, it read like "it could have been" a real life story.

...doesn't sound quite as sexy as school girl and teacher. But, OMG, this was HOTT!!

When I get horny over schoolgirls, I always find this story from my favorites fap the frustration out. Fucking perfect!

ive been using this site for a good year and a half maybe now, discovered this story just today and absolutely loved it; i think it may even be my favrioute up to date. so much so that even after i had cum i continued to read it, i love dressing up amd naughty schoolgirl is probably one of my best or it seems to be with my husbands reaction lol thank you and please write more!

Your story is fantastic. So well written, erotic. The things you thought of! Thank you. Please continue their story. I would love to read more.

I absolutely love this story, as well as the rest of your work that I have read thus far. I've been coming to this site off and on over the last couple years, and I am always drawn to your work. I don't know which of your work is my favorite, but I'd have to say that it is either this one or "My Daughter's Garter Belt". The way you use words to perfectly paint a picture of what is happening is amazing. As I read your work I can actually see the story play out in my mind. The way you explain every last detail is exquisite! From the girl in the hallway to your description of the classroom, none of the important descriptors are left unmentioned. I could actually see "Ms. Granger" hiding under the desk playing with her brother's cock and can totally envision his cum spurting out all over her while that nosey bimbo Whitney was intruding. It almost felt more like I was watching a porno than it did like I was reading. I love your work, please keep it coming!

Could have used some editing. However, a sequel is a must! Maybe have Whitney included.

Was this just a fling for sis or did it evolve into something more? Was she a virgin? She talked like she was but acted like she wasn't. Now that she loves cum on her face was she now letting every frat boy give her facials every other day at college? Too many questions. I will make up my own answers and not make her a whore like most writers do. Good story overall.

wow....so hot!

Just too, too funny! Now can you do a similar-ish parody of The Rats of NIMH? Or TeleTubbies