All Comments on 'After The Bad Date'

bring on the romance and erotica soon

So far, so good. Nothing to verbose or implausible. Keep coming you're doing fine.

this is looking like a very hot story and easy for me to read so please keep going

Can't wait for the next chapter.

How about playing truth or dare with his sister.

Is she a virgin?

Yes, a great brother and sister story. Exploring their feelings and sharing the discovery of how good it is. We need another chapter or two so they can go to the next level, masturbation, oral sex with each other and more.

Cannot wait for the next installment, thank you!

At least this shows that you're willing to accept advice. Next piece of advice? Try working on your dialog. It doesn't come across as very realistic. Read your dialog into a recorder, and play it back. See if it doesn't sound kind of stilted to you. And there should be more dialog and less narration. Build your story with what your characters are saying and doing. Don't rely on the disembodied voice of the narrator to inform your reader what's happening.

there is nothing unhygienic about pussy hair. if there was then why don't she shave her head??? the she would really be hygienic...

How could Howard have entered the innermost chambers of Denise's lair if he was not privy to the Raenslear Codes so carefully guarded and shrouded in mystery? Check your factoids first!!!! You are an inconsiderate nincompoop. Don't ever deign to come to my luncheon again.

There was no fucking that I was looking forward to. So, it was useless and waste of my erotic time.

What? That’s it? There wasn’t any sex. That’s the big experience you had? My older sister and I did a lot more than that. Hope your fiction is more erotic than your real life stuff.1be

Not everyone wants to read a novel every time. Little short bits about encounters are just as fun for some. I might like a little more actual description of her and how she looks and make her a bit more of a tease than just a sister so there is better visualization. But that's just me.

Seem to have got a few negative comments on this story. I think it's ok so far. Could do with describing the brother and sister, don't think we even know their names etc.

If you intend to continue this story as a series you might want to make that clear in the story title rather than the forward of each chapter of the series.

So far so good...

Im dnjoying both of your incest stories. Please continue to give us more. Dont mind most of these negative comments. You see they posted anonomously! 2/3's of ghem probably dont have any storeis at all.

Seriously I read both stories waiting for sex, NOTHING! Not even helping each other masturbate! This was really anticlimactic for me and sadly I still haven't orgasmed 😌

I'm curious to see where they go from here. I think you're doing a fine job.

No fucking at all shucks!

Was her head shaved bald? No telling what couties live in that mop of hair. Hygiene FIRST!!! idiot...

Keep up the writing. I know from personal experience, in reality especially a brother and sister coming together sexually, they don’t always jump straight into wild fucking. It is something that blossoms.