All Comments on 'After The Swim'

First person narratives are fine if you're reporting from the scene of a breakin. Avoid it at all costs in stories, as

it just doesn't fly!

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as opposed to the other poster,i actually appreciated the first person perspective.It made the story more believable and intimate for me,personally.Small grammar mistakes prevented a perfect 100.However,still a well-written account.