All Comments on 'Afternoon In La La Land'

Very nice writing. Keep them coming.

Keep 'em coming. I'm thinking pro writer, or soon to be pro. Good stuff, good pacing, sex is utterly believable.

When I grow up, I want to write stories like this.

Brilliant writing. Great story.

Loved this story as much if not more than your other offering. What I loved most was the fact that he was usually into guys (which is my usual fare), but he was turned on by a beautiful sexy woman and if she looked anything like your picture in your Bio, I can easily see why, as you look so gorgeously sexy. Colin xxx

p.s. Would love to read more of your tales, as they are more than well worth reading.

Found this gem again...certainly one of the more memorable stories on the site. Looks like Jay has gone on to better things and fare thee well, Jay. Pro quality for sure and by now you've only gotten better. Thanks for a short but great ride!

Especially the unusual and hot interplay of private and public here: out in the sun at the pool, public; in secluded high end private property, private; phoning around and making the deal, public; sharing her life story, private; and so on and on, on so many layers.

And the uncertainty of it all, by both. And, why exactly she thinks he owes her? I have ideas, but would lie to say I got it. Then, I'm just a guy, and you know, there is always that little mystery about girls, no matter how old and seen around you are. Nor need all always to be told.

Two very strikng stories, written 6 days apart, almost 6yrs ago and both so very well written, yet so different emotionally on the part of the protagonists. Both were unsure they wanted to be on the path they found, but it worked out so very well for both. The sex was just perfectly told in both; so vividly real. I am sure “Jay” you have moved on to bigger and better things, and wish you all the best. But I wish you’d write even one more here, “for old times!”

Wonderful story, and amazingly well crafted! Thanks for a fun story and a great read.

River View Guy

I would love, love, LOVE to read more stories from you! You have a supernal gift.

Awesome story- bummer that there aren’t more.

Well told, a story within a story; very Midsummers Night Dream.

What a gifted writer you are. Sadly it seems as if you have disappeared from view ☀️