All Comments on 'Afternoon Snack'

Really liked it. Keep up the good work.

On a quick read I found no glaring errors until the very end - "You've warn me out..." should be "You've worn me out..."

A good first effort. I could visualize the scene. I gave it 3 stars with the emphasis on "keep on writing." I've made you a Favorite Author, so I hope to see your next story when it comes.

I love how descriptive you were. You write really well and the whole thing was just something you could visualize. Sexy!

I love all the small details you have. Bravo! No waiting on the next story you right!

SEGSY!