All Comments on 'Agent in Distress Ch. 04'

Thanks for the chapter!

The story is very engaging, easy to read and flows fast. I did want more sex and feel nearly as frustrated as Lana. I look forward to the training, please put in plenty of spanking.

Okay. I'm ready for the next few chapters. Please post more. Don't leave Me hanging 😭😭😭😭 lol. Also you said the story will be 8 chapters or so, I think it might be more. Seems like there's so much to cover 🤗🤗

Thank you Naomi, I've written about 8 chapters already and have the finale in my head but not written, I'd say 10-11 chapters total. I don't know if anyone will stay with me that long, lol. I painted myself into a corner with Chapter 6's flashback, I thought it would be a great idea but now I'm struggling with it. It might take some time but I'm trying! ;) and I'm sorry for those who want more sex, I'm frustrated too! :)

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Loving the slow build up and breaking of Lanas will. Add in some anal and oral for good measure btw.

I like this story a lot. It would be cool if it was ever published as a graphic novel too. The world building, the devices, Lana's character development. She's really cool and I love her powers.

It's weird how despite how horrible Lamare is being, his actions are almost more helpful to Lana than Warrick's. Warrick seems to respect her identity, which could get her killed if she can't adapt her behavior to suit the needs of the mission. It's definitely a quandary about how Lana can help these people get what they want and still be true to herself. It's crazy watching her fall prey to her vulnerability despite her strength and self-control. It makes her stand out more as a heroine when she resists but obviously can't do more than what is reasonable. It's also funny how much she really likes Warrick.

I think what bothers me about Lamare though, is "he" acts upset when Lana disobeys. I mean he should kinda be, but he's getting a unique challenge, right? It seems counter intuitive to his instincts as a dominant male to want her to act okay with wha's happening to he. If Lana were to succumb, then what appeal is left for him to do anything with her again since there's nothing left to chase/overpower? You'd think he'd privately want her non-consent and reluctance to last as long as possible so he could continue assaulting her breasts progressively do more to them / gradually move to the rest of her body when he got the chance (or whatever), and get a unique satisfaction since most other slave girls likely expect and embrace it as part of their world.

Even though she may enter into some denial, I feel like I don't want her to lose her dignity or gain it in the form of embracing being an outright slave, not when she knows how much real torture other women on that planet are going through because of that culture.

Jeez this story makes me think, who even does that on here XD

I think Lamare is the spy. He is going to get them in and the. Tell Nikos that he brought the commander of the army to him, and he is going to think that he overdosed her on the Somarian fruit, so she won’t have her powers. At least that’s what I hope happens next. But she will gain them back and put the slave chains on Nikos and another pair on Lamare, so she can take them back for trial. But I want her to call in love with Warrick. I read all of this today, and it’s great

I agree that it is great writing. However, you talked about how Lamare should be glad she is fighting because he is a dominant. I disagree. He is a bully, not a dominant. A dominant wants the best for his submissive and to make her into the best person she can be. In the end, for a real dominant, it is all about the submissive. Lamare is just a bully as evidenced by him bullying Nika and making her betray her mistress. And yes, he did help her to find her weaknesses and feel more like a slave. I hope she can over come that. But he gets enjoyment out of her humiliation and feeling like he is better than her just because she is stronger. He doesn’t see the logic in her point about Warrick is stronger, so does that make you a slave? She is going to find power in her submission and then find her powers and finish her mission while still finding the freedom in submission to Warrick. Her submission to Warrick is going to make her a stronger better person. At least that is what I hope

I'm so happy to see a discussion going on! Ellienora is right in that Lamare is not a dom, he's just a domineering bastard, with unclear motives, but I can't say if he will betray them. ;) Chapter 5 should be posted soon, it was submitted Oct 15. That should answer some questions about Warrick and Lana. I try to make my stories and characters realistic, despite the settings, and that can be challenging. Thank you for your patience, I know the story is a slow burn. I am trying to meld romance, intrigue, slave training and other things along with a coherent storyline, and I hope it doesn't all fall apart and end in disaster. :)

Reluctance is okay for me but straight noncon has to be very carefully done for me to tolerate it. I very nearly gave this a poor rating because I'm not sure it was necessary for things to go so far. Only the parts with Warrick redeemed it.

Where is it? Your comment said you already submitted it but I don't see it for some reason?

I'm very sorry you didn't like that part. It's a difficult line to walk, and I purposely started the story in non-consent category because I didn't want to mislead readers that this was a romance or fantasy story. Much as I'd love to please everyone it's not possible, so I just tell the story as best I can, and let the readers decide what goes too far. I wish I got more feedback like yours (positive or negative), it'd be easier to know how I'm doing in that regard.

I have to warn you, I think you will like Ch 5, but there's more non-consent coming in Chapter 6 and later. Lana is after all on a planet of slavers and some evil men. But I will try to be mindful of the line as I'm writing the unfinished parts, so thank you for the feedback. xoxo Tanuki

PS to Anonymous, Chapter 5 was submitted 6 days ago, sometimes it takes a week for the editors to get to your story and approve it.

She needs it ) give it to her... With lamare, veers, the foreign ambassador, not to mention all the petty checkpoint inspectors along the way... Allow a bit of languish time in ye olde briar patch ;

So love your story! The part where Lamare confronted Lana with being a slave to her body - as all females (sic) were - was both enchanting as (in my view) a bit unrealistic as in my experience men are far more prone to follow their lust and temporary disengage their brain than women. But hear's to fiction.

Best story of this type I have read.. brilliant..