All Comments on 'Alan's Thoughts Ch. 09'

Been waiting for this forever!!!

I'm so pleased that you finally got a chance to post this chapter. Please keep writing and I hope the next chapter is posted soon.

After talking with his dad, he definitely needs to have a talk with his niece, alone.

Excellent story, well written. Looking forward to more chapters.

Thanks for sharing your writing.

Glad you're back for another installment! I wonder if his dad has this ability, too? Also, please write more of Sarah! I think she's perfect for Alan and they definitely need a happy ending. Perhaps she warms up to him/starts getting emotionally involved and he eventually wins her over? That'd be the perfect ending. Good luck with the rest of chapters!

Great story, please keep writing more.

Personally, I don't really like Sarah being so controlling and blackmailly but it seems like she might be settling down a little. Keep the story going!

Amazing episode in this saga, as always!

I am wondering if Rachel did end up losing her other virginity.. It'd be kinda unfair if you didn't write that out to us.. lol

Good work! Cheers !!

Where is the mind control? Come on, with that skill you can do more than make a yandere [cum] like Sara.....

Whats wrong with this series? The dude is walking dildo at this point with no thoughts of his own other the. Fucking.

Also why make him a mess?? He swallows with an open mouth. Blinks all the time. Hesitates allt he time. Cant get out or finish a sentence before cut off. Shift akwardly all the time. Not to mention being pushed around and called ugly and small dicked by a 19 year old, wtf?

He keeps writing about her waste. I wonder if he means her anus?

Bill S.

Just loving this story, bugger the errors, who cares, not me.

Scores 5/5