All Comments on 'Alextraza's Chronicles 01'

Loved the story. Look forward to future adventures.

As a straight (but not homophobe) guy, I dont generally get into the whole futa thing but, DAMN... this story had my dick out and being fisted almost the entire time.

I only saw one mistake worth mentioning ("Without pulling herself from the tight confines of the police officer Heather rose up on her knees and lifted Sarah's legs up onto her shoulder."... that should have said Brooke, not Heather...), but overall was very well written and edited. A pleasure to read, Thank you.

Stop using so saying all the time, so many ways of telling the reading that a character is acting on what they said. Yet all you seemed to use was so saying. Whenever you notify the reader of a character expressing something, "So saying Brooke....." Gets repetitive and seems like that's all you can come up with. Apart from that I enjoyed it.

thanks for the advice. I missed that one, and i guess so did my editor. Ill try correct it for my next story. you might not hear about those 2 again for a while. my next story is about a succubus getting let loose on a family of 3. if you could recommend an editor i'd appreciate it. I haven't heard from mine in a bit

And im straight too. i got into lesbian stuff a while back, which ended up with them using strap on's, which somehow morphed into girls fucking with real dicks they could feel, not plastic. I've never really viewed the whole futa thing as gay

I very much enjoyed this story. I like the way you write. I hope you will continue this story arch. As a suggestion for future chapters perhaps have your gene give out her "gift" without stealing her victims pussy? Just a thought. Regardless of how you proceed you absolutely should continue this.

I liked it, thanks for your work

I'm not a writer so I will not criticize those who are! I enjoyed the hell out of your story!!! Keep on writing and I'll keep on reading! Just saying!!

So sexy wish I was that police officer