by SylviaG
Thank you for this story. For me your characters were pretty similar in chapter 1 to Chapter 15. They never really grew. Zack in chapter 1 should be unsure of himself but cheeky seeing what he could get away with but by Chapter 16 he should have complete control over all the women and be the glue to hold the family together. When Sylvia’s mother came to Sylvia’s, Zack hid and scurried away in his jocks. This could have been the defining moment where he was a man and stood his ground and controlled the room.
But it was fun good story I liked your twists. Keep writing.