All Comments on 'All That Glitters Ch. 06'

More more more please

.....And more pleease!

Excellent space adventure, five stars! Thank you for it.

Semper Fi.

If your sex was as good as your hand to hand combat I would keep reading

I give you 5’s and I have tried to read your work twice

But stories without exploring intimacy and relationships don’t appeal to me

Great story, but the spelling errors are distracting, e.g. back-quick for back-kick, chock-hold for choke-hold, steel for steal, coping a feel for copping a feel.

I can't be the only one that loved the thumb in the pussy. Best part of the chapter.

Also

He realized immediately that it was a faint.

He realized immediately that it was a feint.

I wont harp much on this, since others have pointed it out. That said, you need your editor, and some appreciation for hand to hand fighting that you don't currently possess.

I'm a big fan of the rather terse style you've chosen. It gives your story a unique feel.... always good.

But the typos are horrendous for someone of your imagination and ability. There are sooo many.

Were for where

Similar examples throughout. Wish you could find someone to fix these. They are literally ruinous