All Comments on 'Alley Affair'

Good start but no build up..right to smoking and sex in the alley?

The woman needs to smoke more. The story needs to be longer and more character development.

A nice first submission, Bronze. It got me wet when I fors read it..:-)

Sure it's short and, I too don't particpate in smoking, but any thrill that leads to a lustful conclusion is great for me. I am new tonight to your writing, but looking forward to reading your other series.

Thanks