All Comments on 'Almost Pt. 03.2'

Cheryl went thru Dan's door

THROUGH, THROUGH, THROUGH, you are writing a STORY not a bloody text message.

Well, my doubts about the previous chapter have been explained!

This has been a fun and enjoyable chapter. Honestly, I had not noticed anything of what the Anon comments, perhaps for having read the story in my own language, but that has not distorted at all the argument of this story. I loved it, and if I have to make some criticism (constructive), I would like the chapters to be a little more longer.

Good work, do not be discouraged and continue your work, worth the effort.

5 * for you.

I apologize for my English (yet and forever), isn't my native language.

I agree with pervious commenter, make the chapters longer. Work on your editing more. Story still holding my interest but in the first chapter, everything points to the main character Dan wishing he would never have met Samantha, but everything here aims at them getting together. Just one more thing, those two agents are (I think) the best part of this story. I would suggest you keep them in the next chapters. Looking forward to chapter 4. 5 stars for effort.

Wanting more!!!

@ anon re: "THROUGH, THROUGH, THROUGH, you are writing a STORY not a bloody text message. " - My comment: Thanks and you are correct. I have tried to work harder on my writing thanks to people who point out errors. Sincerely, thank you.

@ TheOldRomantic: Your constructive advice and encouragement are taken and to you a sincere, thank you!

@anon: Make the chapters longer. My comment: Thanks for your encouragement and this suggestion.Thanks for still following this silly, stupid story. Sincerely, thanks!

@ arrowglass: Thanks for kind words of encouragement. I have a full-time job but I am working on several more chapters at the same time. Sincerely, thanks for your kind words.

I can't let this finish without encouraging readers who click my name and look in my favorites. All those writers were the inspiration for putting the nonsense in my head on this site. They are so many talented writers here who share there work. Truly some great reading. And last but not least, thanks most of all to Literotica for creating this site. Thank you for allowing me to post this silly stuff.

It could only be better if it had longer chapters. Five stars.

I read this all in one go. I like it, but it's not for everyone. 5 stars for effort. Looking forward to your next chapter. You should check out the editors listed here. Your story is good. It could great with an editor.