All Comments on 'Almost Pt. 05'

This has a lot more potential before is romance is finished! 5*+ so far

Brilliant, I just wish the chapters were longer and more frequent.

I agree with the other comments. Great story so far - thank you for sharing your thoughts.

Best chapter yet. Looking foward to to next. Lots of charecters which could be confusing, but each one has been given distinct personalities. I thought I knew where this was going but I'm so sure now. Good Story.

Great story with an unusual, yet highly interesting plot.......More please!

I have to say that this is my favorite chapter yet of this story but I have a few recommendations for you. There were quite a few editing errors that tend to distract from story. I would suggest to get an editor to help clean up the story if possible. I know when I am writing and email I'm horrible about proofing my own work. If its really important, I will get a co-worker or my wife to look at it to see if it make sense to them.

The other point I would like to make is the same as some others have already, if you are going to write 1 or 2 page chapters, you need to post more frequently, otherwise the readers will feel it is not work there time. Perhaps wait to post until you have completed it and then release a chapter a day or every other day?

Good way to add suspense, I only hope you carry on writing and don't disappear like some other authors/writers it takes balls to do what you do, I hope you keep yours, Francois L Baird(SA)

Love the story line , looking forward to the next chapter. Please keep it up!

tooo much wholesome "good ol' american" politic shit...

the kid is a national trasure and just like that after all these year suddenly they freely tell her family EVERYTHING? couldn't they settle for "he work for us, national secret"?

same for him, blabering everything...

Thank you for your comments. I will consider your suggestions.

all the haters. This if fun!

You may not be a Tom Clancy but I find your story amusing. Keep going!

that was funny. I would think a lot of the BS with the parents could have waited till at least a third date. lol

Read this a long time ago. Enjoying it again.

Sweet! Love what Agent McDonald did at the end!