All Comments on 'Alternate Earth Pt. 04a'

...okay as a life long metal tgurl I was really digging this....then it went all fucking VH1/Disney. This is a joke right? Like 14 paragraphs describing an imaginary band and no sizzle? These babes sounded like the sexiest metal gurls since VIxen.

Where is the sex and drugs? This was as lame as the movie Almost Famous and PLEASE ...no fucking self respecting meta head would EVER be caught dead wearing a Kurt NO-Brain short, hell you did not even spell his loser name correctly.

This had so much potential....what a letdown and true waste of time. Why didn't the band give the hottie leather fanbitch some milk and cookies?. That would fit so well with this lame ass story. - Strutter

I totally agreed with Anonymous above until I realized there was a part 2 and read it. You had a great buildup but all of the bang was in part 2. If you're going to break up a story like that, put in something to give your readers a taste at least. That said, the story (with part 2 included) was great. Keep writing. I'd love to see where you're going with this.