All Comments on 'Alternative Pt. 02'

Detailing is good. But could be better too

Felt like hot

Story is superb. Please continue

If this is your first venture into writing, and English is a second language, I commend you.

The story is erotic; however, in both stories, I didn't understand, the initials and colon that prefaced the character speaking. I don't think it belongs in story writing, but rather in a script.

Good luck with part 3