All Comments on 'Amateurs'

Well-written, believable dialogue, and steamy sex. A superior first chapter. I can't wait for the next one!

It was quite ok, until you started having the characters saying "oh yes lick my fucking asshole you bitch" etc. That kind of silly dialogue completely ruins it.

It is ok for us to lose control but not you. You must get all or most of us there.

When you get too deeply in and it gets too grossly smuttie you turn off more people than you turn on - not good and you are good except for that. Just a constuctive thought to consider.

I like the dirty talking very much. It is a turn on to read about one strong woman dominating another woman.