by MaryAnderson
I really enjoyed the first two chapters, but this? Different strokes for different folks, I guess. I do look forward to more of your writings though, and hope to see a return to your original format.
Why wouldn't he simply stand up, slap her and leave? Who wants to stick around a woman that talks like a three year old and behaves like she's still in diapers? This whole mess was simply unbelievable, even for fiction. I about laughed myself silly at the dialogue. This story was neither clever or interesting and given the comic level of the characters, it was a complete waste of time to read. Just plain awful.
I'm with Jedd11 on this one. Pretty off the wall and a stretch in the disbelief department. But I think that you probably have some more hot stories to tell about your heroine.
...MA, I just gotta say you are clever writer of erotica. This chapter reached a new level in creative salaciousness.
I hate the subject of this chapter and cringe at this fabulous fairytale.
I love the skill you displayed in imagineering this bootylicious pornography.