by YDB95
Who was Dave? Right when Renee and Tom are talking about Penny she calls him Dave.
I also found it odd that Tom had no reaction at all when Renee essentially offered to sleep with him. She said something about "if you want to explore anything while you are here"... And he had 0 reaction instead he brought up Penny.
Great story, though.
Great little ghost story. I haven't read Ogg's original, but now I'll have to. In tone and style, it did remind me of his work. Well done.
Good story. A few slips (proofreader?) but otherwise very readable. Better than the original.