All Comments on 'An After Hours Fling'

This is a great start to your Literotica career :)

Good, but Peter's changes from embarrassed and shy to dominating and bold and then back again is too sudden. We either need some background info to make it believable or much more gradual change, or just keep him shy and embarrassed. I didn't think the dom attitude added anything to the story.

Loved it! Keep writing. :)

Absolutely loved this story & would love to read more about Peter & Lola. I do agree that a little backstory is needed. Maybe have the next story (or even a retelling of this story) be in Peter's POV. I'm assuming that he has had more than one girlfriend not be able to handle all of him. Maybe he accidentally hurt one of them, I don't know....He seemed to have such a huge hang-up about this. Can't wait to see him gain confidence....endless possibilities await this couple. Keep writing!