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by SaddleRider

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 3 years ago

I love your stories. However, they need to be heavily edited and proofread, and grammatical errors need to be corrected. Often the sentences don't make sense because of a lack of punctuation or a need to be broken into two sentences. One glaring issue I have noticed is the use of transitive verbs as intransitive. But overall I get what you are trying to portray so another 5 stars for this story as well.

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30+, in a poly, and happy to be. I have been asked to put the Erette stories in order here if I could. I can, so here they are: Note: I have been asked to include a story order for the Erette stories for clarity, so here it is in its entirety: 1. A Bargain Made 2. A Bargai...