All Comments on 'An Evening for Four'

This is my first submission - Any comments are welcomed. If you would like to read more of my work please let me know!

--Nault

Some really good things in here. Some sexy interactions. But every time I got pulled in, something in the story would bum me out. The characters would be bored or not into something. In an erotic story, you may want to be more positive with more engaged (and happy) characters, so the reader can be sucked in and happy, too.

a great little story, with a ring of truth to it. I loved the fact that you came so close to fucking Laura but didn't. Nice touch. Thanks.