All Comments on 'An Old Mans Wish'

I enloyed the story it moved at agood pace and unlike other authors you noted the time lapse from the scene in vegas and the meeting with the attorney as an example. I did notice a few spots where the wrong word was used to that end i would say more proofreaders would help.

Way too long. Predictable

That whole sequence of Daniel learning to strip was tedious to a fault. I don't care how well-meaning a person is you can't take over a financial empire worth 10's or perhaps 100's of millions of dollars and make it hum. Fantasy is great, but this is just too far fetched for me. It was a fun read, however, so I gave it a 4*

"i didn't recognise you with your clothes on" gag with the laughing bouncer.

Yes it was obvious where the story was going, but was interesting seeing it getting there. (perhaps the setting up their own business bit needed expanding, iy seemed a bit rushed)

Great read

You will only hear that crap from the mouth of someone who is already rich...

The story was okay..

should have gone on.

Enjoyed the development and the layout of the story. The simple "people" whoever they are was slick. Amazing the background you can find out about the people you're around. Tis true. Observe and remember. Thank you for the story, and the reminder of what we're doing in life. Even little Kathy rated above the "vultures". GP

Wouldn't one just love to have been Jason. I am not a person of wealth but I have a few relatives I would love to treat similarly.