by wordsinthedust
VERY DIFFERENT B/S STORY, LOVED IT, THANKS FOR GREAT READING.
JERRY
Well written, good build-up. There was just enough anticipation without it becoming just a tease. Nice work.
Great story! I hope there's more to come with these two kids. I'd love to read about wht happened when they got home as well as the next modeling session.
Great story would love to see at least a part 2, where Lisa gets involved.
That was amazing! Perfect build-up, perfect finale. Definitely needs a Part 2, please!
That's exactly how I feel , overwhelmed . Your build up was great as was the pace of the story . I think you could have part 2 without Lisa being part of their love exploration and later perhaps ....
You have the opportunity to rally stand out if you keep it as a love story and not just the old routine of raw sex without feelings .
My sister was talking about a change of career. After reading this I may have an idea. Seriously good, very well written and hopefully only the start of the story. Thanks. UK CYNIC.
A great job. A story well told. It did much more than keep my interest...I was there. Thank you.
I loved this story. It maked me feel like I was actually there with them. I hope there will be a chapter 2 to this great story.
This was easily the best organized, plotted, and executed a story in this genre I've ever read. It demands a sequel...
Please, please, please.e
why did you stop we need to know the rest do the parents find out,does she get pregnant,do they keep fucking,does lisa find out they are siblings continue soon
Fantastic story. I really enjoyed reading this story. You should continue with at least one more chapter as this is too good a story to leave hanging like this.
You built a real couple and drew out the tension. Great climax. I hope your other stories are this good. I want to read more.
but oh so satisfying. A great erotic twins story. Now I want to read the remaining chapters.
That was really GREAT I almost lost a load just reading it. I too wish I would have been the boy....
I think someone doesn't know just how little amateur models (especially for college students) really make.
Loved the characters seemed real. Loved the build up. Very hot, very erotic!
good tension, very inventive and plausible story line,,,,well done!
I love this kind of story where the love for one another is detailed by the author. As I read the chapter, I could feel the love between Ali and Tommy. Can't wait to read the other chapters. This chapter gets 5 stars for excellence!
RecHiker
Without the siblings wearing wedding rings, Lisa would instantly figure out that they were related. Cousins in not siblings.
Anyway, it's still a fine story. 5*.
Its weird, when I go searching for new stories on here to read and occasionally run across this again, I cant help but to reread it! :)
I agree with Mike2501. Just found it in the Randoms and reread. After all, it is one of my Favorites. Now I may have to reread the sequels. LOL!
This is one of my all time favorites; I visit it often, all of the chapters. I guess it is a fantasy but wouldn't it be wonderful if it wasn't. I'll never know why Mom didn't give me a sister. Or, maybe I do know because I don't think she would have approved.
This was a great story. Short and sweet. I was on the edge of my seat the whole time. Would love a sequel story.
Twins are said to be able to communicate with each other in ways that defy understanding. Fraternal twins, as brother - sister twins must be, do not originate in the same egg, but they've been together from the inception. Is not love between them a form of love for oneself? I wonder if relationships like this one are more common than we'd imagine.
This was a wonderful story of sibling love. The suspense was wonderful. I hope to read more about these two sibling lovers!
I want to them together forever. I love how they slowly open up to each other.
Well written beautifully paced erotica. What more could the read want? Perfect! Well done!