by Acktion
the sex scenes were pretty good, but didn't like the story line at all... just sayin'...
Thanks for the feedback. And for your honesty. For the record, I don't particularly either. Esther... whoops, I mean Janine! Janine wouldn't let me tinker with it like I thought it needed. She's a bit... ah... stubborn.
Not bad, but the postscript was a downer. Also, people have "bowels," not "bowls."
LIked the story, couple of mistakes, but hey, it's your story, tell it the way you fucking please. Ending was a bit flat, bit down, but maybe the next story gets the ending this one should have had! Keep Writing!
I appreciate you reading, voting, and taking the time to comment to let me know.
While I tend to agree with you that I would have preferred a more happy ending in the end (all puns intended), Esther wanted her story told just as it happened.
Hopefully, the next tale of a little tail lubing itself in the wings will be more to your liking.
My fiancé and I have often talked about her giving her ass to me on our wedding night... Something neither of us have experienced. Thanks for the story!
Slightly sad ending. Still enjoyed it though. My partner and I always joke that the only "virginal" place left is HIS ass which I'm planning to Fuck on our honeymoon.
Off to read your other stories. I like your writing style.
I divorce the slut that's still so much in love with another man, she won't give her husband her ass. What a bitch.
To take a breath is "to breathe", not "to breath". One's a verb; the other, a noun. Aside from spelling, they're pronounced differently.
When a guy is fucking your ass he comes in your bowels, not in your bowls.
'murrican English, I suppose.
I found Mike to be an unlikable character even before he broke off their engagement. If it was based on a true story, then you did it exactly right by making him that way. I thought it was a good story overall.
Poor husband not allowed to fuck his wife’s tight ass in spite of the fact that she before had given it away to a bastard that didn’t deserve it!!