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I have a suggestion.

Use a dictionary, a brake stops things, a break means an interruption to a process.

A fresh set of eyes looking at your work before you post it would help catch any spelling or grammatical errors you might have. Additionally, you may want to avoid starting several sentences in a row with the word "I."

Maybe it's just me, but when I read a story with so many grammer errors it is completely off putting. The story line becomes harder to follow when the reader is busy trying to rewrite the story in their own mind. Once I could follow the story line, it wasn't bad. Keep trying, and don't forget to ask someone for help with the proof reading.