by Egmont Grigor
It's just not written very well, and laced with all sorts of juvenile stupidity.
not very entertaining, have a look at other writers like DG Hear, Ohio, Danielle, Scouries or the Wanderer to get an idea of how to write a story
Even Just Plain Bob at his worst is ten times better than this
I see no point whatsoever in taking the trouble to read a story,then in a fit of stupidty making an offensive remark.I have read most of your submissions,and none in my opinion require[or deserve] a vitriolic attack.Write on author,maybe another chapter of stocking tops,only you know.
Thank you T43HUNTER6 in ENGLAND. Brilliantly expressed. Self-appointed executioners will be irritated by your thoughtful and mature comments but I award you a rating of 100, after due consideration and careful balancing of opinion, of course.
Not worth the time I took to read this, better luck next time
How old is this writer? This is just a lot of schoolboy fantasies strung together with bad writing. Concentrate on your school work rather
This was atrocious. By far one of the worst stories I have ever read. I'm sorry to sound like an asshole, but I'm blunt and when faced with an awful piece of literature, I have to respond. I say this because I know you're capable of writing great stories. It seems at times you just shrug and say fuck it, I'm too tired to write a decent piece.