by Xantu
I have spent the better part of the day reading one page at a time, while doing other things. I couldn't walk away from it for very long. Great Job!!
Lyn
...you exceed my expectations. I wish I could write as creatively as you do. Beautifully done!
At the beginning of the story i wasnt sure if i would like it or not (this perticular chapter) because devin had changed so much from the other chapters.. but i liked it.. you write wonderfully. :-)
-sinful puppy
Having read some of your other stories, I found myself needing to finish this one. The insight into a submissive relationship, and the depth of character...
Just wow...
Really interesting that you wrote this first and then went back and started the relationship again. I wound't have liked Devin so much from this first story, the details you gave us of his responsibilities to her in the other stories was really good. Of course she'd go to London with him!
Since they are out of order i am not sure if there is one after this....can you put the order down for us?
Never thought I'd come across an equal opportunity BDSM story...but Xantu has nailed it...an imaginative concept -- and skillfully exeuted. Truly excellent...thanks for a great read...take care -and be well - hcl
While your story kept my interest, it sure had its bad moments. Like talking about vomiting in the middle of a hot scene, ravishing her ass raw like he had, bumping her head into the wall, I mean, c'mon, I understand this is fantasy but a rape fantasy should be just that, don't go any lenght in denying this was way too brutal to be consensual.
After finding the list order, which was a pain in the ass...
Some was good, some was bad. Bad grammar, outrageous scenarios. Good romance...then THIS chapter?! Talk about the shits and disappointment!
Don't like how he seems to want an unresponsive blow up doll. You have not established her pussy or orgasms as being out of control. That makes the whole first half of this disturbing.