All Comments on 'Angelo's New Kitty'

Loved it. Especially the way he took control. I hope he gets her friend as well.

loved the story want more

fuck wish that was my lil bitch

What the fuck is this? "That couldn't be Josie he thought mouth going dry." Do you know that you can use commas? It's okay. You can do that. Of course, the mindless zombies won't mind. In fact, they'll say I'm nit-picking and they'll also ask, "Where's your stories?"

would have been easier to read if you would have used commas. but none the less good story.

Please learn that words that are similar are not the same. For example you wrote, "Her mother loved to bitch and nag more then she liked to screw..." IF you meant that she liked to bitch and nag some more BEFORE screwing, that is one thing. However, I believe you meant she would much rather bitch and nag as opposed to screwing. If I am correct, you should have used the word "than" instead of "then". There are other examples of this type of confusing writing in your story. Don't stop writing, just clean it up and you will have much easier reads.

dezurtdawg

This story was submitted two days before I was hospitalized, and my friend, who loved it, submitted this story from ones I already had done. So thanks for bringing the mistakes to my attention, even the really rude one :)

Continue the story and get Amber involved in a threesome.

Her licking Josie while Angelo fucks Amber from behind. And then get the three of them to get Bettie high and film her getting it on with both her daughter and Amber.

It's a shame they don't own a dog...maybe Amber does.

This was an excellent story and don't concern yourself about the "comma" criticisms.