All Comments on 'Annie and Dan Pt. 01'

1 Star

A good start. Hope chapter 2 will be following shortly.

page 1 wS GOOD, PAGE 2&3 WERE NOTHING BUT REPEATS OF PAGE 1, NEED TO GET SOME HELP SOMEWHERE AND QUIT EMBARRASSING YOURSELF

You are developing your characters and providing the background story necessary to understand further events in the story. I liked the his and hers version of the same events. It helps to understand the characters thoughts and provides a basis of understanding the decisional elements for further decisions that they make and the interplay of characters interacting with plot developments. Very well done for 5*. I am looking forward to chapter 2. (Some of your critics below must only be interested in a 1 page porn scene by faceless and emotionless cartoon characters.)