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Click hereAfter years of desiring my mother, I still cannot believe how far we have gone in the last four months. I only hope now that soon, I will finally be able to make love to her.
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TerminusOmegaover 9 years agoAuthorYou can see more of my stories on StoriesOnline.net. I can't post some of them here, as they violate Literotica's guidelines.
Anonymousover 9 years agoI posted on your original story about what a wonderful writer you were, and I still subscribe to that. To the very first poster "Anonymous" (who made the disparaging remarks), I would suggest you stick with comic books...they are probably more your forte.
You are truly a talented writer, and I personally hope to read more of your stories.
TerminusOmegaover 9 years agoAuthorOk, I'll admit I did not make that entirely clear. I just submitted an edited version that states that before the story.
rightbankover 9 years agothere is nothing designating this as chapter 02,
there are no comments at the beginning suggesting that the reader should read some other story first,
nor is there a box to the side of the comments with "also in this series" and the name of the other story.
It wasn't till after reading the story and looking through the comments that I found a reference to a previous story.
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Anonymousover 9 years agoPlease do not listen to other readers who skipped the first part for whatever reason and continue writing this amazing story. Can't wait for the next part.
Anonymousover 9 years agoIt's a nice story, erotic and hot in spots, but you absutely do NOT pull off convincing the reader Dana is a woman. The perception is all wrong. Dana just drips "blue" from the beginning. Women are much more cautious until they reconcile themselves, then it's full speed ahead. Also, by the end of the first story, to two women, they've already "made love". It's nuances like that that give you away. Keep trying, you'll get there.
TerminusOmegaover 9 years agoAuthorThe story is a continuation of my other story, and she points out she's a lesbian right at the beginning of the first part. Also, I'm sure the description also says Dana is female.
toJohnny7over 9 years agoI had no idea this was female on female action until the "You are a naughtly girl" comment when she was licking her mothers asshole. My opinion changed back and forth a few time before then, and using a bi-sexual name like Dana was no help in learning the gender of the writer. I would suggest that you do the big reveal earlier in the story to weed out those who don't get off on the whats happening. Very hot story though.
