by Addicted2Writing
@A2W - what a great start! i loved everything about it - the story, the characters, the writing, and most of all the humor! i laughed out loud more than once - truly delightful. can't wait for the next chapter!
extremely well done. most deserving 5 stars!
Thanks, STG. I'm glad you like it. It has been a test of wills between Scooter and me, but we just want this to be good....Like, me NOT posting chapters with my comments to him included!!!
I'm waiting for chapter 2 to be approved, so look for it shortly....like, hopefully this weekend. Scooter has 3 and 4 to edit and it all depends on the mods picking it up and approving it.
Check back for more!
Very,very good . I just really liked it, all of it and can't wait for the next chapter, what more can I say? *****
This is one of better written stories I have read on here in quite some time. The story line and the character build-up is excellent and I look forward to Gayle's upcoming adventures.
The only error is saw was on page 1. You said he mother was rarely comatose when I think you meant rarely alert
Thank you!!...
5 stars
Once again a well written story that leaves me wanting/needing more..
Will send up prayers to the lit gods that they approve quickly.
@Anon-Yep, you are correct. Boo-boo on my editor's part! He has admitted it and I have given him 20 lashes with the cattail. No more mistakes will appear.
@shysub-Yes, many prayers are needed. Thank you. lol
I love this story so far. Can't wait for the next chapter. I have a feeling Gayle is going to be in waaaayyyy over her head and he is going to enjoy every minute of her distress.
@Northeastdom: Thank you for the nice compliment!
@Mayness: Chap 2 is pending so hopefully any day now you'll have it.
@jennyb: Yeppers! As you said, waay over her head. But it'll be fun!
The humour in it is what makes this a beauty
Terminal syph lol
Well done lady
5/5 well deserved
Brilliant and very detailed start. This is excellent writing the remainder of the story promises to be extremely interesting indeed. I can't wait in fact. Well done, maximum five BIG stars. I love it.
What an amazing start to what promises to be a very delicious and exciting story. I love how you've already solidly established who these two strong characters are, and I can't wait to see where you take us!!
This is amazing! I love lit with a build up and detailed story. Both Hamish and Gayle are very well written. I appreciate when authors provide readers with details and insight to what each character is thinking. Though I love erotica, I don't like when there is nothing backing the story and it is just sex. This series is going to be brilliant. Thanks for sharing - Thanks
P.S.
Your editor sounds like a genius!!!!
I loved the start. Great sense of humor and a wonderful opening for the reader to get to know the main characters. Sometimes anticipation is the best way to draw a person in.
OK, I finally started to read this series. I can tell already that I will like your style. :) I love when she snaps and asks him how big his dick is. That had me snorting. Chapter 2 as soon as I get another free moment... Excited for where this goes!
~Eris/DeathAndTaxes
This story remains unfinished. As the author hasn't made an appearance in over a year, it likely never will be. Shame really, it was quite good.