All Comments on 'Ashley's Angelic'

...and they both got lucky - after one false start, lots of misconceptions and some insecurities.

Thanks for sharing and I'll read your next story(-ies) with interest.

Dirty talk is appropriate for lots of stories, but I don't think it works well here. These people have been friends for years, and yet Ashley goes into this porno routine without either of them cracking a smile? That seems very unlikely, and I found it jarring.

It is clear that you spend a lot of time and effort in reviewing your work. It is a pleasure to read something that is well constructed, grammatical and flows well. I wish one could say the same about many of the articles on this site.