All Comments on 'Ashley's Dark Awakening Ch. 02'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago

Ashley certainly learned her place in life, as a black cock slut! She's good at it too!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
it's totally stupid!

no one in their right mind would let them be treated like shit even if he got her pregnant. A load of CRAP!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
this is the kind of story

that makes interracial not worth reading. However, there are a few good IR writers that offset this type of trash.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago

Great Story hope its going on

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
What a load

of crap! It's too bad that writers like you destroy the good feelings that are in other stories where there's real love and compassion. No wonder there's so much racial hatred toward blacks.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Nice Story

Nice sequel to the first one! Hope to read more of your stories!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Keep It going

Hope to see Chapter 3. Love these types of hardcore breeding tales. As for those who want more love and understanding in their stories, buy a fucking romance novel you fucking losers.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
This storey really sucked shit thru a straw

Was very boring,long winded crap shoot,i got to the 2nd page and wanted to shoot myself so i didn't have to continue,im not to sure what did happin in the end i was so fucking tired of the way it was going, and quit after the 2nd page,so anyone reading this before the storey,do yourself a favor and stop before you start, this really sucked, just after 2 pages,can you imagine reading the whole thing....pulls gun out,slides back the hammer,checks magazine for rounds in chamber,a round is chambered, places gun at side of head, pulls trigger, the suffering ends, thank god i never had to read the end of this shitty fucking storey

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Yeah i have to agree with the shit thru a straw

this is was of the worst piece's of shit i've ever read,long and boring, was really let down, i wasted time reading this, its time i will never get back, Uh-Oh you owe me some time for this, you should be sued for time well wasted and made to pay everyone back thats had the mistake of reading this pile of shit

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Total garbage and poorly written

very bad, your spelling is terrible, misses the mark completely, poorly written and just boring as hell, I wish you could vote negative, for this is worthy of a ( -97 ), it truely did suck,big time minus F to the 10th power

Lynn_MXXLynn_MXXalmost 12 years ago
Chapter 3?

Room for a Chapter 3 perhaps? I'd like to see the reaction from Ashley's parents when the shit hits the fan, and whether or not she ends up as a single parent living in the ghetto or maybe finds someone else

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Generally...

I am flexible, and take a benefit of the doubt with writer's abilities. But this story shouldn't be here. It is dull, horribly written, and I could care less about the characters. I was bored to tears by the end of the first page!

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago

Very good. I particularly liked the subtitle: "The black seed has been sown!"

teganslutteganslutover 11 years ago
wow

Negative comments are really harsh and unnecessarily cruel. If you have didn't like it, fine. But you don't need to be an asshole about it. I thought it was very hot. Thanks.

DiannahDiannahover 11 years ago
5 stars again!

Normally, I don't care for pregnancy stories, but this one is by far the best one I ever read. On top of it, it is also a perfect follow-up to the first chapter.

Also, you get my rarely given 5 stars for this one. You are clearly one of the best writers on Literotica!

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Chapter 3 I hope?

I really, really enjoyed this story. I do hope there are plans for a third chapter. Whether it be with Derren, or hopefully some of the others at the mall, I hope Ashley enjoys a very dark future.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
What drivel !

I know you warned this was racist but really ....a man speaks to ANY woman like that ?? One sick story .

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Horny as fuck

God this whole series is fucking awesome. Please put back up the first one. God I love these

uh-ohuh-ohover 10 years agoAuthor

Terribly sorry everyone - I'll get to reposting the first chapter again. Someone reported it for 'Bestiality'... Really... Anyway, thanks for pointing that out and I should have it back up soon.

marypatmnmarypatmnabout 10 years ago
mary schelske

want to be black bred like this Mary

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
part 4

When are you going to make part 4?

history_buff2003history_buff2003over 9 years ago
Other reviews and a suggestion for parts 4 and 5

It looks to me like one person wrote about half a dozen of these reviews. They keep using the same phrases over and over again. What they lack in taste they more than make up for in venom and vitriol.

Chapter four. Mom comes to visit. Confessions are made. Introductions, socializing, seduction and mom joins the pregnant coeds. Chapter five. Mom and sister visit........

TigersmanTigersmanabout 9 years ago
Hot

This story keeps getting hotter. I love the fact that Ashley got her sweet little white ass bred black. All white girls/women should have at least one black baby, preferably two. I loved the character development in this story. Your portrayal of Sandy as a bitch was so spot on. I've known girls just like Sandy, oozing with venom at every chance. I think the way you handle the sex scenes is super good. Keep writing.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Great Story!

I love how detailed it is too.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
One of the best stories I've ever read

I have read alot of interracial stories but this is easily one of the best ever. Please never stop writing this story! Please!

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Multiple breaks in immersion

Realistically, if a girl tells a man to get out of her house, legally he can't stay there anymore and she'd start calling the cops. Immersion was shattered when he aggressively insisted on staying after she told him to leave. Also, I can't get over how easily some words get misspelled (such as "peek" being written as "peak") that also take away from the story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 5 years ago
Her Desire So Real

I began whoring almost three years ago; most of my 'clients' are black. Because they are more demanding of me, more rewarding as i submit I prefer blacks. I even encourage them to bring a friend for a threesome with me. Like Ashley, I have became addicted to black men. As they undress me with their eyes my body experiences stirrings that I have never experienced when white men look me over. This is why your story in enthralling, so real for me. aimee

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
Suwen

Historia piękna i dobrze opisana jednak nie jestem zwolennikiem epitetów typu ''Dziwka , suka itp.''miłość i ruchanie musi być piękne i czyste.Szkoda,że moja młoda żona [23 lata ] ma jeszcze opory co do czarnych ale jestem pewny,że niedługo pójdzie na czarno i urodzi mi kilku czarnych dzieciaków.Mam już upatrzonego ojca naszych czarnych dzieci.Jest to 44 letni ,wielki czarny jak smoła pracownik pobliskiego tartaku.Już zaprosiłem go na kolację a żona moja akurat w tym czasie będzie płodna i mam nadzieję,że ten olbrzym ja wyhoduje. Byłbym bardzo szczęśliwy

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 4 years ago
Moją żonę

od kilku już lat hoduje kruczoczarny byk [ 51 lat ] swoim afrykańskim,gorącym mocnym juksem - mamy od niego na razie czwórkę pięknych psotnych chłopaków , którzy maja penisy za ojcem i w przyszłości będą kryli białe żony białych mężów .Żona ma teraz 29 lat i kilka ciąż przed sobą, bo murzyn rucha ja jak młody byk i zawsze spermuje jej pipkę

AnonymousAnonymousabout 3 years ago
My Ashley

My Ashley is actually my niece. Later on a different day Ashley was out with friends and the same black guy started in on her again and she refused. Later he started hitting on her friend Debbie and she said one dance. Away they went. After the dance Debbie went to return to their table just as she was almost there the black guy grabbed Debbie's arm and said I'm not done with you baby. Let go Debbie said. Like I said I'm not done with you. That was when Ashley stood up and told him to get lost. He said shutup B____ who do you think you are? Ashley said you are not only blind but can't remember I kicked your butt once do you need it again? You that B____ caught me off guard? Not that you were caught off guard I told you no. He shoved Debbie and tried to attack Ashley and she stepped out of the way and kicked him in the butt on the way by to speed he up and he actually ran into the bouncer. Show over again. Thanks for letting all to place a public comment.

FinickyPanickyFinickyPanickyabout 3 years ago

Harsh and extreme brainwashing. A bit too quick since getting accidentally pregnant is supposed to be more traumatic than that, but I do love the fuck scene at the end. Perhaps, Ashley isn't going to relapse to her old self anymore.

Sweetnothings77Sweetnothings77over 2 years ago

Some Mens I was with was just like Derren where they liked and wanted me to tell them who I was and who I belonged to while they was putting there Black dick IN me GOOD and DEEP and then cumming inside me.

Sweetnothings77Sweetnothings77over 1 year ago

Updated after reading this again I liked it SOoo much that I been with Men who put there Black Baby IN me and I even gone like a Black Cock Slut to Other Mens. One way Older Man I got with every time I was Pregnant cause He didnt like Cumming IN my Pussy unless He know I was all ready Pregnant and Showing. :-) I LOVED how He and some Other Mens done me I was with Before and During and even right After I was Pregnant and had my Lovers Babies or just being with a few and not sure which one done the deed of putting there Black Seed DEEP IN me.

AnonymousAnonymous6 months ago

I am 22 year old Hindu married woman. I am staying with my older siister-in-law's family, for over a month, and will have to be with her for another 50 days, because my husband is on an assignment in Singapore. I don't know why he did not take me along. It is as per his wishes that I am staying with my sister-in-law, who is expected to deliver in around two months. After reading this story, suggested by my sister-in-law (Jharna Di), that I must have masturbated, at least 20 times, wiith a dildo I borrowed from my four- year older married sister-in-law. The only thing I have yet to adjust with is that I had to let her 54- year-old lover, Mazid's huge, over 10" long and 5-6 " around cock drill deep inside me for last three nights, filling me three times in my pussy and once in my mouth every night, while my sister-in-law enjoy her old lover's 17-year old grandson, Mansoor. From tomorrow I will have to be in bed with this grandson, who works in a car workshop as a mechanic run by his grandfather Mahima

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