All Comments on 'Asian Innocence Manipulated Ch. 09'

I like the way you describe the girls, the surroundings, and just the feel of the story. I find that a great writer can do that. That is one of my shortcomings in that I find it hard to describe things such as the wind, the smell in the air, the softness of their skin. The dialog is natural and flows. That's a fiver from me.

Nice job, keep writing!