All Comments on 'At Camp with Shanni'

This was fun - I have a lot of camp stories and this sounded like something I might have written. Story: 5/5. Grammar: 4.5/5. I noticed a tendency toward long, awkward sentences (I have the same issue) and a couple of misspelling. Dialogue: 4/5: Somewhat unrealistic,a little stiff. Sex: 5/5. The girl I nailed on the camp washer was named Hannah! :) Be sure to use an editor, and keep up the good work!