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by ElizabethHemingway

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Rad'lRad'lover 16 years ago
Interesting start

marred by a few grammatical problems. Whether these came about because of the South American tilt of the dialog or were just mistakes - I dunno. The story could use more of a build-up - unless I missed chapters 1 through 4.

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