by Swampcooler
Great read and truly enjoyable. I would disregard the other Anonymous comment as what that individual may not be aware is "Come/Coming" is the proper term for the slang of ejaculate, also more commonly used in Great Britain (like mum vs mom, or theatre vs theater). Cum is the derogatory of the preceding term that is still okay to use, but I would advise against arguing for it as "Come" is more proper.
It is possible that "Cum" could be more confusing as it is latin for "with" (i.e.. Summa-cum-laude meaning to be with the highest distinction).
At the end of the day, they both mean the same thing given the context so dear god stop complaining over something more arbitrary.
That was a hot story . Keep it up write more like it .....
Congrats on your first story. Well-written. Very few errors. Interesting mom/aunt twist. I must admit, though, that while I have no problem with the cum/come interchange, I am still chuckling over the novel terms you have utilized for the word "clit." I've been around the block a few times and have read lots of erotic literature but I have to say I have never heard "love rod" or "tool" in place of "clit!" A solid 4 star effort which I will give 5 stars to because those two terms had me laughing out loud!
I just wish you had been as descriptive with the other sex parts as you had the first and second.
Your best story by far that I've read so far. Loved the twist the Aunt being the Mum . You definitely have to do a sequel especially where he nails his sister as well , perhaps all three of them at once.. AND forget all the Anon comments they're all talking shit as usual......
The last paragraph lays material for a continuation, though using "end" after it also could indicate that's all there is. If you do, you might want to address Ed and his threats about contacting his lawyer. Yeah, you had him tell the family, but, let's face it, he could really make trouble for them legally by using her fucking her nephew (that's assuming he doesn't know she's really his mother) as grounds for the divorce. On the other hand, it could be reasoned that he's in a position where this being made public could hurt his business.
Lots of great action! The kid was lucky that Mr. ED didn't slice off his Johnson with a butcher knife though!
love your work it is nice to see such strong emotions in stories I have seen too many stories lately where the people involved didn't really care about each other and they were quick to hook up with many others
I confess I read this quickly as I'm expecting a visitor, so I must have missed some words or a meaning somewhere. I didn't see it as rape or unwilling.
I love stories like this with a twist of unknown relationships with partners.
Added to my short list of favorite stories.
5*
Ignore the Anon crap, it doesn't mean anything, don't even bother wasting time deleting it
H32
Sexual heaven I reckon. A very lucky young man. I hope you will write some more to this very hot story. 1/2 sis is yet to be "inducted" and maybe they can all live together and make babies.
Very very Hot!! Wish you'd continue with Christmas and Anna. 3 lovely women under one roof for the holidays! Five stars!
Very nic little hot read. But...
Now you have the set-up.... Why not have him w half sister, then maybe w the help of alcohol, and maybe medicinal marijuana, fuck them all, at once. Now that would be hot
Hot n sexy family having lots of fun together. Now he is the only man in the family perhaps he should be spending some quality time with his half sister and making a baby.
Sizzling and spicy story! Where is chapter 2 with a pregnancy and some commitment to susan!!!!
5/5
Really hot, though I didn't like him fucking Terri at the end. He belonged with Susan, and there was no reason for him to move on to his mom/aunt. And thankfully Anna didnt come into the story much, otherwise it would have descended into the typical incest orgy everybody-fucking-everybody scenario.
Hot story with an interesting twist. My only complaint is that there wasn't much description of either woman's pussy.
Quite the randy super-stud and of course the 9-inch dick works well in fantasy land. Maybe in part 2 Ed cuts off his dick to inject a bit of reality?
of course he's as hung as the top porn talent...
and 'auntie'/mom can take it in her rump ...what a babe...!
kind of wondered at the beginning the declarative "...no father... " with no further explanation
like the libidos of both women...!