All Comments on 'Avoiding Work Leads To...'

Take pity on your reader's eyes. Your use of "...", "--", etc makes some sections confusing and extremely difficlut to read, thus leading to eye strain. Removal of 99.9999% of all these would shorten and make the story easier to read.

Really really hot, largely down to an incredible attention to detail. Thank you.

If I have one small criticism, it's that we don't get to learn what your characters look like until half way through; if we can see them ahead of time it makes it easier to imagine the fantasy.

Aside from that, great, thank you!