All Comments on 'Awakening for Hubby'

Sorry, but the beginning was very confusing. Couldn't work out who was who. Of course this didn't help,

"Ray was smiling at her as he she walked into the kitchen."

Also,the paragraph formatting sucks. Way too many stand alone sentences. Very irritating.

A sexy story! I enjoyed the way a common setting- at home with a friend, casual night- quickly changes into sexual exploration. I appreciated the variations in paragraph and sentence length. To me, it's a matter of pacing. There's a poetic quality happening, especially towards the end. Thank you.

I enjoyed the story! Yes, it’s a fair critique that some technical elements could stand to be scrubbed and tightened. But looking past that, I found much to enjoy. The unfolding plot, though simple, drew me in. The style, voice, and loose form of dialogue and narrative gave the story a dreamy quality that blurred the lines of action, passion, desire, and thought. The sex scene was smokin hot, emotional and deliciously graphic without being clinically explicit.