by missanastasia
very good story the flow and grammar are great. the only thing i would add is maybe more detail of the beast, i can not wait for more. thank you for sharing.
Was this chapter that bad?
thanks for the person who did comment.
if its shit, ill stop. just let me know
and my plot was going to be planned out and everything
AND the chapters WOULD HAVE BEEN LONGER!
haha
you must keep writing!
i want to know how the story turns out!
so please keep writing and i appriciate you going to writing longer chapters if you do!
I bet everyone who has voted for you wants to keep writing RIGHT GUYS????
you did wonderful!!! although it was short the details kept me satisfied. keep up the good work.
I have no idea what your talking about. This story is going great so far! You have to keep up. Im loving this story so much, but please please please, write just a bit longer. lol.
Another great chapter! I like where you're going with this & look forward to the rest of the story.
You have a great story developing, but could you try making the chapters a little bit longer? What kind of an area does she live and which era does the story take place? Good job and keep it up!
I am enjoying your story very much. Look forward to reading more.
I donĀ“t think this story ought to be under Non-Human as it would fit much better under "Reluctance" - You should try writing something else as this is not turning on me at all but quite the opposite.
Why do you think that the normal reader is so perverted as to like violence?
dn't worry much about negative feedback. always depends on who's reading ur story and if its their thing. u have talent n i like ur story so far. u'll be great in the future.
It's different from most i've read on here! Very exciting, can't wait to see what's next!
the stories are way to short for each post it would be better putting them together to give the reader more to read
That was awesome! Nice touch with arm around the waist. Cuddling after such an experience is important in my mind. :)
I like the story, it had all the the good stuff ... emotions, feelings, action, imagery, texture almost tangible. Well done and keep it up, you have talent.