All Comments on 'Babydoll Ch. 09'

what a sweet romantic story please continue but don't let the mother get in the way that would ruin the whole story

one of the best erotic stories I've ever read. such discription, I feel like I'm fucking ashley, don't ruin the story, please!

great series

can't wait for pt. 10 and beyond

Plenty of possibilities in this very good series,i hope it does not develop into a threesome,mom needs to come in for some more action.

that was great keep goign i cant wait untl 10

What a shame that you bought the Mother into this story - I was such a gentle and sensual story until then - real feelings for Brother and Sister - you should have just had them leave home and set up a home of their own where no-one would know them - see if you can get back to that - let the Mother find another lover

OH! PLEASE BRING THE MOTHER IN. IT WOULD NOT RUIN THE STORY, IT WOULD MAKE IT MORE AROUSING!

i am still reading ch6 but decided to peek at the latest chapter to know if this has a happy ending. if ever you decide to write the next one, keep it between bro & sis. won't the sis be kind of jealous of her mom? considering that bro & sis seems to be really connected romantically, if the threesome pushes through, it seems like the whole story just all boiled down to unromantic sex. i suppose i can understand his attraction to his mother but just keep it at that please. will you still continue?

It was the best story I have read untill the mother came in. I don't understand how he could have had sex with the mother with all the love he had for Ashley. It just does not make any sense.

What happened to chapter 10. I was expecting the mother to come in and cut his b***s off

i want more!!!!!!!!!!!!!

best series ever!!!!!!!!!

all of them sholud SO hook up!!

One of best I've read. Graphic, realistic behavioral descriptions (daring), very erotic- what these stories are supposed to be!! Creative descriptions.

Please -more.

Ron

I love it i want more it was so hard to stop.Your sister should get pregnant.Write chapter 10

100 to the rest of the story. 0 to everything after the rather pitiful mother came in. The story started off with a certain tenderness, that really added to the smut. If you wanted to write a threesome, you should have started it in a different way. The way it is, your guy is just kind of a jackass. Plus...Mom? Not hot. Kind of skeezy.

I had to try really hard to stop reading so it would last longer. I really want to know what happens next. You could end it with one more chapter like you could compromise with your mom and sister. But please write it soon.

This was a very exciting and erotic story, but the ending seemed to be missing.

After he thought he heard something, the story just ended.

Would appreciate to conclusion to this story.

Cheers!

I have had ch 10 90% completed for completed for some time. Just haven't been able to get the right touch on it. Hopefully soon. Just hard to get in the mood.

I am leaving this as a general comment to all writers if you have a story espeacially one that has more then three chapters make sure you give an ending nothing anoys me more.

I enjoyed the little deja vu scene that related back to the first episode. Made things so right.

Hello Mr. Fan, I’m a bucket of shit. As soon as their om comes up here I think we need to get together!!!The fan and the bucket laughed evily, waiting for the main event!

To anyone confused by my comment below, I am saying NOW THE SHIT IS GONNA HIT THE FAN!